Friday, March 22, 2013

Narrative Old man at the beach

Ben arriving at  the beach solitary figure trudging along the sand bare feet clasping his sandals. Wearing an oversized grey and black coat long brown pants keeping himself warm step by step leaving footprints as he walked along
memories of his flash back when he was a little kid.

As he kept on strolling waves was washing ashore and saw seagulls scavenging the last bit of scrapes. seeing from a long distant he even saw people surfing playing and swimming. walking further and further to the crowed of people he decided he will take a rest.

After a few minutes later he carried on walking along the sand he was not so far from the crowd of the people. The crowd of the people and Ben passing each other with care. Hey Ben Thomas said hey Thomas he replied  what are you doing here Thomas asked taking a walk he said what are you doing just he with my family he said Thomas was a friend of his.

Ben arriving at home exhausted and very relieved about  his long long walk at the beach solitary figure.


  1. Hey Lorenzo,
    It's Antonio and I just wanted to say that Your had a lot of detail and it was Nice and it was Juicy Writing. To be honest I would like to say that I would like to read more of these kind of writing.

    Keep up the good work.

  2. Hi Lorenzo,
    I liked your story about the old man,that was very interesting because you added juicy word and heaps of other words.It was great to see this writing on your blog.